When Lucy woke up in hospital it took her a while to piece together where she was and why she was there.
There was no - body in the room. Suddenly, she realised what had happened. It had been Saturday night, and she had been at a party, with loud music and colourful lights. At first, Lucy was with her friends dancing and having some fun, but they soon started drinking.
By the time the party had ended, they were all drunk. Lucy was feeling dizzy and she wanted to throw up. She immediately started walking home. She was almost home when a car ran her over. As soon as this happened, she lost consciouness.
Because of this she was in hospital. While she was thinking about the previous night, her mother came in the room and, after she hugged Lucy, she punished her because she had drunk too much. But Lucy was happy. She was injured and punished for almost a month, but at least she was alive.
Not in the sense of a two-fingered salute, probably. This is the blog of a class of Basque students studying towards the Cambridge First Certificate in English.
Very good accuracy given that this is your first version. However, if Lucy is young enough to be punished by her mother (i.e. under eighteen), then surely she should have drunk nothing, rather than not 'too much'?
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